Daily Excerpt Post - November 1st

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Madeline threw a hand up to shield her eyes from the sun as her brother unloaded the last of her luggage from the car.

“Mom and dad are gonna be pissed” he said definitely, sighing as she rolled her eyes and shrugged.

“No shit,” she retorted after a moment, looking almost bored before surveying the building before her with something resembling uncertainty.

“What’s wrong, sis?” he taunted lightly. “Not having-‘second thoughts’, are we?”

“No,” she retorted shortly even as she bit her lip, pulling her hair back nervously into a ponytail. “A little,” she amended abruptly, shrugging. “I’ve never lived with anyone before.”

“Bullshit,” he replied, elbowing her. “What was Susan, a robot?”

She took a step away from him, crossing her arms in front of her before surveying the apartment building again. “I’ve never lived with a boyfriend before” she corrected before snapping angrily, “You knew what I meant.”

Tim smirked at her unrest, elbowing her again. “Surely you don’t doubt the strength of your bond with young Jeffrey,” he taunted lightly before shaking his head. “Really Maddie, this is a stupid idea. You should just let me take you home-“

“I’m twenty five years old,” she snapped, fumbling through her purse for a pack of cigarettes and pulling one out with dexterity before lighting it. “Home is not with my parents.”

“Ok, so you’re a little bit old,” Tim jibed before looking at her seriously. “Maddie, you don’t have to do this.”

“I want to do this,” she snapped, but her voice lacked conviction as she took a drag of the cigarette, leaning against the car.

“Mad, you just graduated from law school. You haven’t seen Jeff for more than 3 days in a row in over a year. It’s ridiculous to go into that building acting like nothing is going to have changed between the two of you.”

“Nothing HAS changed between the two of us,” she fired back, but again her voice lacked conviction.

“I see,” Tim retorted sharply before shaking his head. “Just come home. You’ll find your own apartment within a month, and it’ll be better than this dump. You forget, you’re a lawyer now, not a student.”

“Yeah, an unemployed lawyer,” she snapped, surprised when he regarded her with real affection before answering,

“Ok, an unemployed lawyer. And how long do you think that will last? A week? Two tops?”

“Tim, in case you haven’t noticed the job marked sucks ass-“

“In case YOU haven’t noticed, you graduated in the top 10 percent of your class at HARVARD. You’d have a job already if you hadn’t just HAD to go to South America after you graduated to build homes for the impoverished children or whatever the fuck-“

“Oh fuck off,” Madeline snapped, but there was no bite to her voice as she turned to him. “I’m scared, Tim”

“I know you are. But you don’t have to be. Just come home, and-“

“No,” she said softly, and though her voice was weaker than it had been the whole time they’d been talking, it was the first time it had any real conviction. “I’m going to stay here.”